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[征文作品] 【色城２０１０文心雕龙】【人妻楚月】（98号）

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细节决定成败,看来作者深谙其道,刘星与楚月的性爱细节描写太具体太形象,让人有身临其境的感觉.从双方的互相挑逗,到69式的互舔,再到畅快淋漓的性爱,作者完整呈现了男欢女爱全景图.更值得一赞的是作者的比喻功力,类似结尾的"象地球撞了过来。呼啸着进入大气层，带着团团的火焰急速而下。荡起的水花，久久不能平静。",形象描述了性爱最高点的感受与特点,让人拍案叫好.只是情节有点平铺直叙,如果加点曲折,相信更加精彩.
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